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Here is my first anime sketch =) I'm a cartoonist and I haven't drawn any anime styled sketches until now. It's a wip of a drawing of random lolis in an onsen. I need to finish the top half of the sketch 
I would like some C+C on the bottom half so I can fix the mistakes before I keep on going  .
I'll post more loli anime sketches in this topic =D
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| Sun Jun 21, 2009 7:54 am |
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I'm not sure you will find much criticism with this level of art 
On the side note, welcome to LAH and I'm greatly looking forward to anything by you 
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| Sun Jun 21, 2009 9:51 am |
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You want criticism? Of that?
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Uh, the hand on the second girl from the right is a tiny bit distorted. I think. Maybe.
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One of the rocks doesn't look animeish enough?
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Ah, I've got it! It needs tentacles. 
That's great stuff, thanks for sharing it. I'm looking forward to seeing more too.
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| Sun Jun 21, 2009 1:35 pm |
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*Tries to speak. Fails.* Sugoi . . .
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| Sun Jun 21, 2009 7:56 pm |
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...0_0 , i can't say more than "wow "...
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| Sun Jun 21, 2009 8:22 pm |
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I'd love to give you some advice, but I think finishing it would work out any kinks you have in there.
Nothing jumps out at me (and that is saying a lot based on how picky I am).
I very much look forward to seeing how you finish this.
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| Mon Jun 22, 2009 5:49 pm |
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Honestly, the only thing that jumps out even being really picky is that the nose on the girl closest to camera is kinda weird, like you took the shaping of 3D anime faces at face value(no pun intended), whereas the reality is that heavily stylized anime cheats on that sort of thing a great deal and only bring in the bridge of the nose and the lip in views from the side or side/back.
Fantastic stuff though, I'm kinda jealous.
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| Tue Jun 23, 2009 4:17 am |
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Very nicely done indeed Ashura!  It's great to see anime done with the shading lines - I can tell that you have a smooth drawing style already. Since you are asking for comments on a picture that is already very nicely rendered, I'll mention a couple that come to mind.
I think the outline of the grabbed girl's hair bubbles should be heavier so that the right "bubble" stands out a bit more from the background fence. Secondly, the water should have a ripple and shine effect - it sort of blends in with the other shading lines of the girls and rocks at the moment. Obviously the dynamics change in pen or color and these nitpicks could be gone but ... you asked.
I look forward to seeing more from you!
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| Tue Jun 23, 2009 5:38 am |
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I agree with Sat-sama. Do more.
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| Tue Jun 23, 2009 5:49 am |
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Can't wait to see more of this....
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| Thu Jun 25, 2009 12:48 pm |
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Read the bubble, then looked at the art. Honestly, I have nothing negative to say.
Anatomy is very well done, background is great, balance of the image overall is handled beautifully. I know professionals in fantasy art that don't juggle all aspects of an image as well as you just have with that one image.
You are honestly the first person on any forum site that I might be taking time specifically out of my day to check on.
Welcome to the collective.
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| Thu Jun 25, 2009 3:17 pm |
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wew o.o
thats really cool o.o
u need to make some more so that i could find something to critism
i would love to see a bit more like that the water is lower^^'
or the little demon tail could bend itself around the loli a little bit, like a in tentacle hentais XD
so that the devil girl nut just grabs her breast^^
and maybe add some drops
the lolis bodies don't look that wet
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| Thu Jun 25, 2009 3:22 pm |
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Hmmmm... Looked again, and I have an urge to colorize that image. Mind if I have a go at it?
I'm guessing that that's Etna and some of the girls from Disgaea, which I'm hoping I'm right on, since that'd mean there's already established color schemes.
Oh, and one thing I finally did notice. The girl Etna(?) is feeling up has her neck off to the side ever so slightly. Easily missed, and not a problem since the rest of the image more than makes up for it.
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| Thu Jun 25, 2009 5:07 pm |
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Alright, I finished the sketch after a bit of procrastination . Is it better?
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| Fri Jul 03, 2009 7:39 am |
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Wah, wah, i just love your style of anime ;3; It's not plain, and it's certainly not bad, you're as good as any other anime drawer, maybe even better.
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